上海交通大学：《英语写作 English Writing》课程教学资源（PPT课件讲稿）Lecture 5 Sentence（2/2）practice

Lecture 5 Sentence 2 (practice)

Outline 1.Objectives of this lecture; 2.know how to polish and refine sentences a.sentence unity b.long and short sentences c.loose and periodic sentences

Outline 1.Objectives of this lecture; 2.know how to polish and refine sentences a. sentence unity b. long and short sentences c. loose and periodic sentences

1.Objectives 1)to know how to polish and refine sentences

1. Objectives v 1) to know how to polish and refine sentences

Sentence Unity Unity demands that the sentence should express one and only one complete thought A unified sentence expresses a single complete thought

Sentence Unity v Unity demands that the sentence should express one and only one complete thought. v A unified sentence expresses a single complete thought

Consider: On his way back from work,he met an old neighbor,and as they had not seen each other for nearly a year,they stopped by the roadside and talked,but in a little while it began to rain,and so they had to say good- bye

v Consider: On his way back from work, he met an old neighbor, and as they had not seen each other for nearly a year, they stopped by the roadside and talked, but in a little while it began to rain, and so they had to say good- bye

Revised: On his way back from work he met an old neighbor.As they had not seen each other for nearly a year,they stopped by the roadside and talked.But in a little while,it began to rain,so they had to say good-bye

Revised: On his way back from work he met an old neighbor. As they had not seen each other for nearly a year, they stopped by the roadside and talked. But in a little while, it began to rain, so they had to say good-bye

Compare: 1)My mother is a teacher,while my father is an engineer. 2)My mother is a teacher,and/while my father is a southern old gentleman

v Compare: 1) My mother is a teacher, while my father is an engineer. 2) My mother is a teacher, and/while my father is a southern old gentleman

Short and long sentences 1.I returned to my room.There was a note under my door.It was from Bill.He said he was in the town looking for a job.He hadn't found anything yet.He was sorry to have missed me

Short and long sentences 1. I returned to my room. There was a note under my door. It was from Bill. He said he was in the town looking for a job. He hadn’t found anything yet. He was sorry to have missed me

When I returned to my room,I found a note from Bill under the door.He said he was in the town looking for a job,but hadn't found anything yet.He added that he was sorry to have missed me

When I returned to my room, I found a note from Bill under the door. He said he was in the town looking for a job, but hadn’t found anything yet. He added that he was sorry to have missed me

2.That day it was very cold.A fierce wind was blowing.It was snowing hard

2. That day it was very cold. A fierce wind was blowing. It was snowing hard